Benjamin Benson

[mamoru]

Player’s Name: Kenneth, just call me Kenny
Player's Gender: Male
Roleplay Experience: 2 years

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Name: Benjamin Benson
Species: Human
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Appearance: Curly brown hair, brown eyes. Claim is Orlando Bloom.
Personality: Quiet, intense, hard-working, determined, terrible communication skills
Biography: Ben is a bit of an outcast. Although he is respected, people keep their distance. He was passing through with his father, a traveling merchant, when he was nine years old; unfortunately, his father fell prey to the unusual wolves of the woods, and young Benjamin was stranded. He was taken in as an apprentice to the local blacksmith, whom he works for still, waiting for a chance to take vengeance on whatever lurks beyond the forest edge. Every other night he mans one of the wooden watch-towers, hoping to discover what it is that makes the wolves of these woods different from any others. Perhaps because he was raised an outsider, he does not have any particular fondness for the cats, and he doesn't believe that they keep the Gewin away.

Roleplay Example

The wind blew through the night sky. The moon could be seen shining down on the world below making it very easy to see even though it was late at night. The night held no sounds and the howling of wolfs could be heard through the small village just on the edge of the forest. Between the village and the forest stood four tall watch towers at the corners of it. Almost every night you could look up and see a familiar face that seemed to be nice and kind but everyone here knew to stay away from this figure. His name is Benjamin Benson and he has had a hard life but is always on the tower looking and hearing the wolfs because they are more than normal and they took his fathers life and wants to take revenge on them. " they are getting closer to the village " Benjamin said to himself as he stood up walking to the window with his gun at the ready examining the forest edge to see six pairs of eye's looking directly back at him . Then he rushed down the stairs swinging open the door and looked for the eye's he saw. But chills started to run down his spine as he remembered the blood red things looking out and feeling the hot breath of the beast on his neck he turned around only to open his eye's then as he stood up relished he was out side with blood around him making the shape of a pentagram.

[Victoria]

I'm always glad to have fresh blood! I don't feel that I can accept you for Benson because he is one of our "canons" and requires a certain amount of experience and setting knowledge. However, I really want you to stick around and apply for an original character.

Some tips: Be mindful of the tense; it should always be past tense. Also, avoid run-on sentences. For example,

"His name is Benjamin Benson and he has had a hard life but is always on the tower looking and hearing the wolfs because they are more than normal and they took his fathers life and wants to take revenge on them."

would be better put as

"His name was Benjamin Benson, and he had had a hard life. He was often on the tower, watching and listening to the wolves; they were something other than normal, and they had taken his father's life. Thus, night after night, he sought revenge."

Also, none of the Gewin have red eyes. Their eye colours are either of naturally occurring human or wolven variety. They wouldn't likely leave a pentagram symbol. Recall that in this alturnate universe, Christianity doesn't exist -- historically, after medieval times Christians associated the pentagram symbol used by pagans with the devil (even though pagans neither worshipped nor believed in any kind of Satan figure). Therefore, as these people are pagans, the pentagram is a symbol associated with spiritual, elemental and geometric positive meanings. Although, I concede, a pentagram that is specifically drawn with one point downward is to the pagans a negative symbol because it represents a spirituality that is subject to baseness.